The Barn, Again

Published July 13, 2012 by Elsa Pla

Using the Objective Correlative, Part 2

I edited yesterday’s post:  I changed a couple of “it’s” to “its” and made better word choices. (One of the features of WordPress I love is that you can go back to your posts and fix your mistakes.)

Here again is the exercise from The Art of Fiction by John Gardner:

“[1] Describe a building as seen by a man whose son has just been killed in a war. Do not mention the son, war, death, or the old man doing the seeing; then [2] describe the same building, in the same weather and at the same time of day, as seen by a happy lover. Do not mention love or the loved one.”

My attempt at part 2 of the exercise:

The red barn was still there — a heart in the middle of a golden meadow. Ancient and alone, it had waited for the right hands to open up its boarded windows and doors. It had waited for light and life to find their way back into its rafters and stalls. All it needed was a sweeping away of cobwebs, a fresh coat of paint, a sturdy beam here and there. All it needed was someone who could imagine the possibilities – someone full of dreams and joy — someone who cared.

NOTE: SATURDAYS AND SUNDAYS I WON’T BE POSTING ON THE WRITE TOWN.

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